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Critique Post
Aug. 29th, 2024 03:37 pmAny questions, comments, complaints or suggestions on how I'm playing Ai?
Just leave them here.
Just leave them here.
[She's getting irritated now. She was supposed to vanish, and they said she did. But she was still here.
Maybe this was hell.
Action:
A. Home: Ai is in the house, looking around for people.
B. A little girl just appeared in front of you. She's on her way to Sluggers house but she's trying to see if people can see her so she's randomly teleporting in front of people on the streets.
C. In the park. She's frustrated and annoyed and throwing fire at bushes.]
Maybe this was hell.
Action:
A. Home: Ai is in the house, looking around for people.
B. A little girl just appeared in front of you. She's on her way to Sluggers house but she's trying to see if people can see her so she's randomly teleporting in front of people on the streets.
C. In the park. She's frustrated and annoyed and throwing fire at bushes.]
[A. CEMETERY: And once again, Ai rises from the dead. Though with a stylish black dress this time. Hey undead breathrin
B. ANYWHERE IN Mayfield: Does Ai care about your character? You're being stalked by a small girl with red eyes.
She see's you.
C. STREETS Do you not know Ai? There's a little girl with red eyes stalking people. Clearly you should try to reason with her.]
B. ANYWHERE IN Mayfield: Does Ai care about your character? You're being stalked by a small girl with red eyes.
She see's you.
C. STREETS Do you not know Ai? There's a little girl with red eyes stalking people. Clearly you should try to reason with her.]
[A. Ai looks happy. That is your first warning. She giggles at you as you walk.]
[B. Locked for Aaron. Ai meanwhile is in a pod somewhere. Someone should really get her out of her.]
[C. Okay there are two little girls fighting on the street. You might want to get out of the way. They're hard to kill, but the fire and black energy they're throwing at each other is real.
But which one is which? Want a hint?
One looks enraged and the other is smiling]
You are not me!
I'm not? That's a shame. People actually like me.
[B. Locked for Aaron. Ai meanwhile is in a pod somewhere. Someone should really get her out of her.]
[C. Okay there are two little girls fighting on the street. You might want to get out of the way. They're hard to kill, but the fire and black energy they're throwing at each other is real.
But which one is which? Want a hint?
One looks enraged and the other is smiling]
You are not me!
I'm not? That's a shame. People actually like me.
Fifty First Summons: Another loss
Oct. 8th, 2011 12:47 am[Ai has been following Kikuri's drone around recently. But she's starting to realize that the little girl isn't going to snap out of it. People who know Ai may have noticed that she's even quieter then normal.
Much quieter and absent.
She's spent the last two days, hiding in her room. But life goes on, and avoiding school ends up with you being droned. So on Friday....
A. Ai is at school. She's not paying attention to anything. Like where she's looking as she walks down the hallway. Trip on the little girl?
B. At the library. She's constructed a fort out of books and blankets in the children's section and is setting up the inside of her fort. You'll see a little girl either in the fort, or around the library with piles of books.
C. Under the cherry blossom tree in her front yard, patting her kitty. Watching the people who walk down the street. Hopefully you're not scared by creepy girls with blood red eyes staring at you as you walk.]
Much quieter and absent.
She's spent the last two days, hiding in her room. But life goes on, and avoiding school ends up with you being droned. So on Friday....
A. Ai is at school. She's not paying attention to anything. Like where she's looking as she walks down the hallway. Trip on the little girl?
B. At the library. She's constructed a fort out of books and blankets in the children's section and is setting up the inside of her fort. You'll see a little girl either in the fort, or around the library with piles of books.
C. Under the cherry blossom tree in her front yard, patting her kitty. Watching the people who walk down the street. Hopefully you're not scared by creepy girls with blood red eyes staring at you as you walk.]
Fiftieth Summons : The reward is clothes
Aug. 28th, 2011 08:10 pm[Ai opened her package from the mail and found...a few sets of clothing. It took her a moment to realize they were just some of the clothes she'd worn over the years, in her stakeouts. Odd. Oh well.
A. You can find Ai walking outside today, she's wearing the clothes in the icon. Along with the ballcap with her symbol on it. She's just kicking a can as she walks down the street.
B. At the park, do you ever get the feeling you're being watched? There is a little girl in a tree staring at you. That might be why.
C. Outside her house, picking up some of the fallen cherry blossoms and putting them in a basket.]
A. You can find Ai walking outside today, she's wearing the clothes in the icon. Along with the ballcap with her symbol on it. She's just kicking a can as she walks down the street.
B. At the park, do you ever get the feeling you're being watched? There is a little girl in a tree staring at you. That might be why.
C. Outside her house, picking up some of the fallen cherry blossoms and putting them in a basket.]
Forty Ninth: Another Year
Jul. 29th, 2011 11:56 am[Phone]
Has anyone been here longer then two years?
[Ai can be found in a few places today.
A. On her front steps, she's reading a book she got back. If you can read Japanese you might be able to see the words 'Hell Girl' in the title.
B. In the park. Oh hey it's a little girl and some other people- ..and now it's just a little girl. /Ai is bored and a little homesick so she's working on her illusions again.
Has anyone been here longer then two years?
[Ai can be found in a few places today.
A. On her front steps, she's reading a book she got back. If you can read Japanese you might be able to see the words 'Hell Girl' in the title.
B. In the park. Oh hey it's a little girl and some other people- ..and now it's just a little girl. /Ai is bored and a little homesick so she's working on her illusions again.
C. At the fountain in the park. She's sailing small paper boats around. Feel free to notice her doing that. Or watching one burn and sink.]
[More confessions. Isn't Mayfield so much fun.]
....I killed my village in an act of vengeance, and I have lost track of how many people I have killed and sent to hell over the years. I have been killed twice at home by large groups of people. Every-time I try and help someone I end up paying for it.
.....I emotionally tortured a little girl and showed her, her dead mother calling out for her because I wanted her to send her father to hell....because he was related to the person who helped kill me many, many years ago.
Slugger and I accidently kissed and I didn't really mind it.
....I killed my village in an act of vengeance, and I have lost track of how many people I have killed and sent to hell over the years. I have been killed twice at home by large groups of people. Every-time I try and help someone I end up paying for it.
.....I emotionally tortured a little girl and showed her, her dead mother calling out for her because I wanted her to send her father to hell....because he was related to the person who helped kill me many, many years ago.
Slugger and I accidently kissed and I didn't really mind it.
Forty Seventh Summons: Another Question
Jun. 30th, 2011 10:19 pm [She's been doing a lot of thinking lately. Never a good sign. After that talk with Japan though, she needed to. She goes to the phones.]
.....
How do you forgive people?
[Action: You can find Ai sitting on the steps of her house. She's just watching the street. And anyone who walks by. No this isn't creepy at all.....]
.....
How do you forgive people?
[Action: You can find Ai sitting on the steps of her house. She's just watching the street. And anyone who walks by. No this isn't creepy at all.....]
Forty-Sixth Summons: Flowers
Jun. 6th, 2011 11:17 pm [Ai is back to normal, finally. She isn't human anymore. And it's a relief. You can find Ai in a few places today, just being herself.
A. The street is on fire. ....okay no, it's not real fire and it's not the road. But a car parked on the street looks very much like it is on fire. Ai is practising her illusions.
B. If you're walking by 1451 Mitchell Road you might hear some quiet singing, if you walk past the cherry tree and into the backyard, there is a small girl in a field of flowers. She seems to be singing to herself again.
C. Sitting on the top of a telephone pole watching people walk by.
D. It's dark it's the middle of the night. There is a small girl wandering around town. Someone should tell her it isn't safe to be out so late]
A. The street is on fire. ....okay no, it's not real fire and it's not the road. But a car parked on the street looks very much like it is on fire. Ai is practising her illusions.
B. If you're walking by 1451 Mitchell Road you might hear some quiet singing, if you walk past the cherry tree and into the backyard, there is a small girl in a field of flowers. She seems to be singing to herself again.
C. Sitting on the top of a telephone pole watching people walk by.
D. It's dark it's the middle of the night. There is a small girl wandering around town. Someone should tell her it isn't safe to be out so late]
Forty-Fifth Summons: Death
Mar. 28th, 2011 11:47 pm [Ai had died.
Again. Frozen to death by diary products. Not a fun way to go. But then again, she was used to horrible deaths. They happened to her a lot.
Betrayed...also again. She couldn't trust people here. But she did. It was stupid, but she did.
And then, all that suffering, her friends. Saki.... Her emotions and just shut down. And then cracked open again as she let her hatred take over and attack the machine.
She wasn't sure what to feel. She wasn't sure if she should feel anything. People claimed that the good emotions would make up for the bad ones. But then again, she supposed they assumed she would get good emotions.
A. You can find Ai walking through the town at night. Not really doing anything. Just walking.
B. In the daytime she is in her room. Leave her alone.]
Again. Frozen to death by diary products. Not a fun way to go. But then again, she was used to horrible deaths. They happened to her a lot.
Betrayed...also again. She couldn't trust people here. But she did. It was stupid, but she did.
And then, all that suffering, her friends. Saki.... Her emotions and just shut down. And then cracked open again as she let her hatred take over and attack the machine.
She wasn't sure what to feel. She wasn't sure if she should feel anything. People claimed that the good emotions would make up for the bad ones. But then again, she supposed they assumed she would get good emotions.
A. You can find Ai walking through the town at night. Not really doing anything. Just walking.
B. In the daytime she is in her room. Leave her alone.]
Forty Fourth Summons: People are missing
Mar. 8th, 2011 05:22 pm[She can't find Aaron. She can't find Aisling. They haven't been droned, they've just "vanished". Ai is remaining calm and looking around. She's noticed the strange statues. But seeing as she hasn't been so much as "walking" as teleporting large distances, she's been able to avoid them so far.
A. Do you know Ai? Are you still in town? If you know her, Ai is trying to check up on you. Which is why she's appeared right beside you.
B. At the towns boundaries, trying to figure out if anything's changed.
And then, after listening to the phones for a while.]
I can teleport if anyone needs to get to safety.
Forty Third Summons: Thinking Again
Mar. 3rd, 2011 11:53 pm [Ai looks at the phone for a while before picking it up.]
How do you deal with horrible memories from very long ago?
[Action
Ai is sitting on the grass under the cherry tree in her yard. She seems to be piling stones up again singing a song quietly to herself.]
How do you deal with horrible memories from very long ago?
[Action
Ai is sitting on the grass under the cherry tree in her yard. She seems to be piling stones up again singing a song quietly to herself.]
Forty Second Summons:
Feb. 23rd, 2011 07:29 pm [There is a small girl dressed in a flowered kimono around town today. She's bored. ....what else is new. You can find her in a few places though.
A. On the top of a telephone pole watching people walk by. Yes she is a creeper.
B. I mentioned she was bored right. Sitting on her steps and folding paper cranes. She's apparently been doing it for a while if the paper crane army surrounding her is any indication.
C. There is a small fire going in the front yard. It's small and controlled though. Ai is currently feeding her paper cranes to it.]
A. On the top of a telephone pole watching people walk by. Yes she is a creeper.
B. I mentioned she was bored right. Sitting on her steps and folding paper cranes. She's apparently been doing it for a while if the paper crane army surrounding her is any indication.
C. There is a small fire going in the front yard. It's small and controlled though. Ai is currently feeding her paper cranes to it.]
[Ai has always been a quiet girl. The shy timid person either hanging out with either silent types or being dragged along by people with more excitable then her.
She also doesn't pay much attention where she's going. So if she walks by, she might accidently brush into you. Sorry about that and all. Ai is pretty bored today so she's going to be just walking around. Feel free to run into her anywhere.]
She also doesn't pay much attention where she's going. So if she walks by, she might accidently brush into you. Sorry about that and all. Ai is pretty bored today so she's going to be just walking around. Feel free to run into her anywhere.]
Fortieth Summons: Let there be pies
Feb. 10th, 2011 10:39 pm [A: Ai sits on a bench at the park, waiting for Bugs to show up. She's still not really sure what's going on.
B. You. Yes, YOU
There is a pie being thrown in your face? Classic gag right? .......this is humorous? The small girl who hit you from nowhere, would like to know that.
Option A is just for![[livejournal.com profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/external/lj-userinfo.gif)
shoulda_toined . Opetion B will be YOU-Ai-Bugs]
B. You. Yes, YOU
There is a pie being thrown in your face? Classic gag right? .......this is humorous? The small girl who hit you from nowhere, would like to know that.
Option A is just for
shoulda_toined . Opetion B will be YOU-Ai-Bugs] [Ai had gone over to visit Saki. She had found Saki's drone.
She had found Saki's drone, and none of the girl's regains. Now back in her own house. Have an angry tearful voice.]
Give her back
[And outside. The street is on fire. What happens when an emotionally repressed and unstable girl with supernatural powers, loses her emotional rock?
Fire. She's throwing fire at the cars, the tree's. And unlike her illusions.
This is real.
She is also trying to find who is in charge of the town. She wants revenge. Anyone at all who knows her....you might want to try and help before she finds them.]
She had found Saki's drone, and none of the girl's regains. Now back in her own house. Have an angry tearful voice.]
Give her back
[And outside. The street is on fire. What happens when an emotionally repressed and unstable girl with supernatural powers, loses her emotional rock?
Fire. She's throwing fire at the cars, the tree's. And unlike her illusions.
This is real.
She is also trying to find who is in charge of the town. She wants revenge. Anyone at all who knows her....you might want to try and help before she finds them.]
[She has to admit she had been a little excited for Christmas. She had friends, family here. And then her gifts Mayfield have a small grief stricken voice.]
...They were not happier without me....
[But in her mind. What if she wasn't there, they wouldn't have to work for her, they wouldn't have to see horrors every day.
But she'd asked them to come. She hadn't made them....and they had been so happy to see her back. They'd wanted her back when she was gone..replaced....
And then she actually opens the gifts.
And breaks down crying. The phone is still off the hook so Mayfield be treated to a little girls sobs.
Family feel free to find her hugging one of her dead companions. One of these people.]
...They were not happier without me....
[But in her mind. What if she wasn't there, they wouldn't have to work for her, they wouldn't have to see horrors every day.
But she'd asked them to come. She hadn't made them....and they had been so happy to see her back. They'd wanted her back when she was gone..replaced....
And then she actually opens the gifts.
And breaks down crying. The phone is still off the hook so Mayfield be treated to a little girls sobs.
Family feel free to find her hugging one of her dead companions. One of these people.]
